After graduating from high school, you have to pass an entrance examination to continue your learning. When you get there, you will find the way that you have learnt at high school is very different from the one in university. Therefore, you will be in shock about this, you must try your best to adapt with that learning style, I think it’s very difficult to do this. But in university, there are many extra activities for all of the students to join in. They can help you to decrease stress. In my opinion, when you take part in extra activities, you will get not only advantage but also disadvantage.
When you study at university, if you just learn and learn, you will know just about what you have learnt in your lesson, you can’t know about our society. Therefore, extra activities can give you many interesting things to learn well. First, you can make friends with many people when playing some games in these activities. Because your friends came from many places of our country, they can help you to know about their culture. Besides, you can get so many strange experiences from them and apply to your real life. I think joining in extra activities is the best way for you to decrease stress and have brilliant mind to learn better.However, if you don’t know how to manage your time, extra activities will give you many bad results which you never expect. When you have many activities to take, you may neglect your study because you don’t have enough time to finish your homework and prepare new lesson for the next class. Therefore, you have to stay up late and get up so early to finish your duty. I think if it happens day by day, your health will get bad and your study will do down. This is the thing you never want to face, isn’t it? So, you have to learn how to manage your time to get how many extra activities to join in, it can prevent you from these bad results and give you many good benefits.
In our life, all the things also have both advantage and disadvantage, but you can get only their advantage. How can we do this? It depends on yourself and what you have done. Therefore, try your best to do all the things you can to get the best things in your study.
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