- Introduction:
Do you know the film called “Autumn in My Heart” ? I think all of us have ever watched this film once because it is very famous in the movie world. Therefore, how do you feel about the autumn in this film? May be your feelings about them are very different because everyone has a certain season to enjoy the beauty of the nature. Each season has their own particular traits such as: spring with the most beautiful flowers everywhere, the green grasslands on the hills, and also the wet leaves in dew in the morning…; summer with the intense light of the sun, the summer rain dispeling the sensation of hot,…; autumn with the falling leaves, the changes of the leaves’ colours,…’ winter with the white snow, the sensation of cold,… According to me, I like the autumn very much. Since I was born, I have spent about 20 autumns. It seems that the past 19 autumns are very wonderful to me. However, the 20th autumn is really the worse one because my grandparents have passed away at that time. It is really bad, I’m about to give up hope when both of them leave my life. And last autumn is my unforgettable moment in my life.
- Body:
The scenes- the autumn is coming: cool winds instead of the hot ones, sweet smelling, leaves have changed their colours from green to gold
Something wrong happens: my maternal grandfather is at the death’s door; after a few minutes, he draws his last breath and goes away forever.
After my grandfather’s death about 3months, because of the lung cancer, my grandmother also goes away forever to reunite with my grandfather
- Conclusion:
Up to now, 1 year goes by, but I still remember every moment in this autumn. Just in only 3 months, my maternal grandparents passed away and give us the wound in our mind that we can never forget. But after that, I can get experiences in my life: “ Try to do all the thing if you can, if you don’t, you will regret all your life”. And I will always keep it in my mind.
THE SADEST AUTUMN
Do you know the film called “Autumn in My Heart” ? I think all of us have ever watched this film once because it is very famous in the movie world. Therefore, how do you feel about the autumn in this film? May be your feelings about them are very different because everyone has a certain season to enjoy the beauty of the nature. Each season has their own particular traits such as: spring with the most beautiful flowers everywhere, the green grasslands on the hills, and also the wet leaves in dew in the morning…; summer with the intense light of the sun, the summer rain dispeling the sensation of hot,…; autumn with the falling leaves, the changes of the leaves’ colours,…; winter with the white snow, the sensation of cold,… According to me, I like the autumn very much. Since I was born, I have spent about twenty autumns. It seems that the past nineteen autumns are very wonderful to me. However, the 20th autumn is really the worse one because my grandparents have passed away at that time. It is really bad, I’m about to give up hope when both of them leave my life. And last autumn is my unforgettable moment in my life.
One day, I wake up and open the window, and I can feel the cool winds instead of the hot ones. I take a deep breath with the fresh air, I can sense the sweet smelling . In my garden, all the leaves have changed their colours from green to gold, they are about to have different styles in their appearances to welcome the coldest seasons- the winter. I know the autumn is coming. To me, I have an internal life, so I like the quiet things. And the autumn is really the great time for everyone who is the same to me. It is the time for us to mix with the nature to forget the busy and tired life, we can stand quietly looking at the streets covered with the fall leaves and enjoy the rhythm of natural world. However, when I am taking the most of happy moment, an anxious feeling suddenly appears in my mind. I don’t know what will happen but I’m really overcome by tears. I try to calm down and begin my new day. In this evening, the bad thing actually happens to me and my family, my mother announces me that my maternal grandfather is at the death’s door. Four years ago, he fell and became to be paralysed on the right side. My father and I run as fast as possible to my grandparents’ home to see him the last time. When I arrived, all of the members in my great family are there, all of them cry their eyes out. And I’m too, I can’t hold back my tears when I see he taking my maternal grandmother’s hands and saying some last words in his life. After a few minutes, about ten minutes, he draws his last breath and goes away forever. We will never see him again, never talk to him again and never take care of him any more… My maternal grandmother is about to lose her consciousness at this moment because the one who has been living with her for about 60 years has passed away, in front of her eyes. After his death, all of us are very sad and try our best to take care of my maternal grandmother. But it seems that we can’t do anything more, she has a terrible illness, her health has went down when she does beyond her ability to take care of my grandfather. She tries to suffer without telling us about her pain because she doesn’t want to make us worried. When we awake to her expression, we take her to the hospital but it’s too late, it’s the last period of the lung cancer. We know that she is very painful but we don’t know how to cure, except relieving her spasm of pain by the medicines and our love. After my grandfather’s death about three months, my grandmother also goes away forever to reunite with my grandfather. It seems that it’s good for her but it really bad for us, we all lose heart to be low-spirited when they leave us. It is actually the worse autumn in my life.
Up to now, one year goes by, but I still remember every moment in this autumn. Just in only three months, my maternal grandparents passed away and give us the wound in our mind that we can never forget. But after that, I can get experiences in my life: “ Try to do all the thing if you can, if you don’t, you will regret all your life”. And I will always keep it in my mind.
your writting has many picture. it makes reader easy to symperthy with you
Trả lờiXóabut why don't you devide body paragraph to two part
INTRODUCTION (2ms)
Trả lờiXóa- Background, hook 1
- Thesis statement 1
BODY (4.5ms)
- Good ideas 2
- Coherence, unity, development 2
- Language: Grammar, vocabulary (0.5)
CONCLUSION (2ms)
- Summarize (1)
- Lesson, suggestions (1)
Total: 8.5