INTRODUCTION:
Nowadays, because the demand of people is increasing, many companies are established to manufacture the consumer goods to serve them. But when they finish the processed products, how can they introduce these products to the consumers? And advertising is one of the best solutions for them to solve this problem. However, anything also has two-sides, one is the advantage and one is the disadvantage.
BODY:
- Paragraph 1:
For openers, the advertising can bring many benefits for not only the companies but also the consumers.
+ the best way for all the companies to make public their new products - the populace can know many things about these brand-new products
+ use the TV commercial to attract the baby’s attention - feed the baby more easily
+ the customers can also buy these products at home through the telephone or an internet.
Therefore, all of us can get many advantageous things from the advertisement.
- Paragraph 2:
Therefore, the advertisement also has the wrong side, too.
+ The companies can waste a lot of money
+ the viewers will waste a lot of time to watch one program many times, feel annoyed – the advertising program cuts into with their favourite programs.
+ many trademarks of many companies for one products - make the customers confused to choose
+ some companies want to promote by the leaflets and they can make harmful for the environment
our planet can become a garbage dump
As a result, we can realize that the advertisement also has the dark side.
CONCLUSION:
For these reasons, all of us can know that advertisement looks like the others, it has not only the advantage but also the disadvantage. the advantage is always good for us, but the disadvantage isn’t. Therefore, we have to try our best to ameliorate the disadvantage to make it better. And if we unite together and have a good awareness, we can do it very easily.
ADVERTISEMENT
Nowadays, because the demand of people is increasing, many companies are established to manufacture the consumer goods to serve them. But when they finish the processed products, how can they introduce these products to the consumers? And advertising is one of the best solutions for them to solve this problem. However, anything also has two-sides, one is the advantage and one is the disadvantage.
For openers, the advertising can bring many benefits for not only the companies but also the consumers. Many people say that advertising is the best way for all the companies to make public their new products. The populace can know many things about these brand-new products such as their function, usages, prices, etc. One more thing, the customers can also buy these products at home through the telephone or an internet. It’s very convenient for the housekeepers or anyone who don’t have enough time to go out for shopping. Besides, if you have the baby and they don’t want to eat, so how can you feed them? I think you can use the TV commercial to attract their attention and you can feed them more easily. It’s a very helpful way. Therefore, all of us can get many advantageous things from the advertisement.
However, all of us know that nothing is perfect, and the most tiptop thing also has the defect. Therefore, the advertisement also has the wrong side, too. The companies can waste a lot of money to have an advertising program for just one product on the TV and the viewers will waste a lot of time when they have to watch it many times or they can feel annoyed when it cuts in with their favourite programs. More over, there are many trademarks of many companies for one product, so when they advertise their products, they have to compete with the others and they can say something that is out of the products’ features. It can make the customers confused to choose which products is the best one. In addition, some companies want to promote by the leaflets and they can make harmful for the environment. Because when they give the leaflets for the passers, after they read them, maybe they don’t throw them into the trashcan and they can throw them away. If it happens to one person, it’s a problem, but if everyone do that, our planet can become a garbage dump. As a result, we can realize that the advertisement also has the dark side.
For these reasons, all of us can know that advertisement looks like the others, it has not only the advantage but also the disadvantage. the advantage is always good for us, but the disadvantage isn’t. Therefore, we have to try our best to ameliorate the disadvantage to make it better. And if we unite together and have a good awareness, we can do it very easily.
grammar,development,vocabulary,unity and coherence: good.
Trả lờiXóayou divided into 2 paragraphs with 2 sides clearly.
however,2 last sentences in conclusion aren't very clear.
Ideas: A
Trả lờiXóaThesis stamen: A
Development: A
However, there are some mistakes in grammar: “one product” not “one products”; “it can” not “It’s can”; “everyone does” not “everyone do”;
And I think the sentence: “the advantage is always good for us, but the disadvantage isn’t.” is nit necessary because it’s true and everyone knows it.
The writing and outline: A. especially your outline is clear and specific. It helps reader easily to catch your ideas.
INTRODUCTION (2ms)
Trả lờiXóa- Background, hook 1
- Thesis statement 1
BODY (4.5ms)
- Good ideas 2
- Coherence, unity, development 2
- Language: Grammar, vocabulary (1)
CONCLUSION (2ms)
- Summarize (1)
- Lesson, suggestions (1)
Total: 9