- INTRODUCTION:
In our busy and modern life, there are many beautiful places for human to relax after hard working days. And nobody can deny that coffee shops are suitable for everyone to run out of stress. For me, Tram coffee shop is the best place to stay at weekends with my close friends or my special friend.
- BODY:
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Our life will be very wonderful if we have some friends to share our feeling. Especially, being in a beautiful coffee shop and talking with friends when we are happy can make us happier. And Tram coffee shop is really a great place for us to stay at weekends in our noisy city.
- Artificial mountain in miniature - very beautiful and superb
- At the bottom of this mountain – a man-made bamboo bridge, some kinds of storks and deers - it looks like one part of our natural forest
- Imitative waterfall – sound of water flowing is very pleasant to hear
- Decorative multi-coloured lanterns – very beautiful – remind us of the Mid-autumn, we always played the lanterns when we were children.
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Because of the romantic site, we can also meet our special friends here, it sounds like we have a date with our lovers.
- Wooden door and glass windows – we can’t hear what is happening outside
- Music very sweet - easy to talk to each other and hear what our partners say because of the quiet space – many kinds of light, soft, folk music for everyone so we can choose which songs we want to hear
- Candles instead of the electric lights- make the atmosphere warmer- many shapes for a couple to choose
- Conclusion:
In my mind, Tram coffee shop is the best place for everyone who don’t like the boisterous style. And I am, too. At weekends or in some holidays, I often come here to enjoy the rhythm of my life. Therefore, why don’t you come here to find out the wonders of your life?
Introductory paragraph: A. the way to lead to your topic is good
Trả lờiXóaThesis statement: A
Development: A. first paragraph, and second paragraph is conected by a sentence. it makes the writing logical.
ideas: A
but i think the sentence:"many kinds of light, soft, folk music for everyone because we can choose which songs we want to hear". the word "because" is not suitable. why don't you use "so"
* grammar,vocabulary, development, ideas, unity:A
Trả lờiXóa* inductory parqagraph: A
* development: A
I have the same idea with Lien: the sentence "many kinds of light, soft, folk music for everyone...", you must use 'so' instead of 'because'