Tram's coffee shop

  • In our busy and modern life, there are many beautiful places for human to relax after hard working days. And nobody can deny that coffee shops are suitable for everyone to run out of stress. For me, Tram coffee shop is the best place to stay at weekends with my close friends and my special friend.
  • Our life will be very wonderful if we have some friends to share our feeling. Especially, being in a beautiful coffee shop and taking with friends when we are happy can make us happier. And Tram’s coffee shop is really a great place for us to stay at weekends in our noisy city because it is decorated very carefully. In the middle of the shop, the decorator make a artificial mountain in miniature, it looks very beautiful and superb. At the bottom of this mountain, he puts a man-made bamboo bridge and many kinds of stocks and deers. Beside, there is a waterfall and the sound of water flowing is very pleasant to hear. In general, it looks like one part of our natural forest. On the ceiling, it has many decorative multi-coloured lanterns, they are very great. When looking at them, I feel very happy because they remind me of the Mid-Autumn, I always played them with my younger sister. Although our life is always in a bustling atmosphere, I and my close friends usually come here to unwind and find out many interesting things from the other’s life.
  • Because of this romantic site, I can also meet our special friends here, it sounds like I have a date with my lover. It is very great. I like the wooden door and the glass windows since I can’t hear what is happening outside and I can focus on our talk. Moreover, they are many kinds of light, soft, folk music so that everyone can choose what they want to here. And the music is very sweet, we can easily talk to each other and hear what our partner says. Besides, the boss uses the candles in stead of the electric lights to make the atmosphere warmer and he prepares many shapes of the candles for a couple to choose in their special days. It sounds very wonderful for me and for everyone. Therefore, I think when we have a date here, we can have many splendid memories to retain when to time goes by.
  • In my mind, Tram’s coffee shop is the best place foe everyone who doesn’t like the boisterous style. And I am, too. At weekends or in some holidays, I often come here to enjoy the rhythm of my life. Therefore, why don’t you come to find out the wonders of your life?

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